Something Unknown

Author: MysterydarkPoet ASL Info:    20/f/Aust Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173 Words: 85

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Something Unknown

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Take it for what it's worth & give nothing back to me The shadows and the darkness Have hanuted me for too long I've been left searching All my life For a love unknown A love not found I've been waiting All my life For something Someone To come save me from this nightmare I choose to call reality But I'm trapped somewhere In someone else's dream I need to be wanted I need to feel loved I need to feel Only what is real

Submitted on 2007-03-22 21:04:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Hey, I liked this piece. It's a feeling I can't really name, but i can definately relate to. The flow seems a little off, and there's a typo with the word 'haunted' but other than that I can't find much else to pick out. Good work, keep it up Regards, Kalinda

| Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by Kalinda | [ Reply to This ]

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