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Something Unknown

Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 85
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Something Unknown

Take it for what it's worth
& give nothing back to me
The shadows and the darkness
Have hanuted me for too long
I've been left searching
All my life
For a love unknown
A love not found
I've been waiting
All my life
For something
To come save me from this nightmare
I choose to call reality
But I'm trapped somewhere
In someone else's dream
I need to be wanted
I need to feel loved
I need to feel
Only what is real

Submitted on 2007-03-22 21:04:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I liked this piece. It's a feeling I can't really name, but i can definately relate to. The flow seems a little off, and there's a typo with the word 'haunted' but other than that I can't find much else to pick out. Good work, keep it up
Regards, Kalinda
| Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by Kalinda | [ Reply to This ]

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