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Author: siradrian
Elite Ratio:    4.87 - 213 /123 /68
Words: 42
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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In phantasmagoria I lie
wading through dreams
of rising state
How taken by distaste
in selfish waste
of pleasuredomes embrace
I hear me
I live to see
anguish lost
peace gained
love once strained
triumphant now
the golden river.

Submitted on 2007-03-23 05:26:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  the ending is weak.. the subject is great.. you sud elaborate a bit and there you have it...

a great peice of work
| Posted on 2007-05-20 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]

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