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    dots Submission Name: milky cobradots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 561
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       sorry about the love kick guys.. i promise i'll diversify soon...


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    dotsmilky cobradots
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    never mind such sightly loss
    inside these woods dark shades of water
    trickle tiny nests of discomfort
    and often more than ever
    we're simply losing air

    winds gather my lovers tongue
    and weather can be a sure sign
    of things to come
    so let's just think of turbulence
    as another way that passion
    lets us know that it's storming inside

    i know you in the few ways i can
    the ways that let me know
    that we're breathing eachothers smiles
    in the vibrating night
    you so distant in your creaking bed
    i so distantly forrested

    though at times we waver
    weak criminals of one anothers' hearts
    the truth lies amongst our perfect hands
    folding eachothers faces in the light

    i give you these words
    that if i'm held inside you like a prayer,
    like a fog in the milky cobra twilight,
    i will show you the moon
    turned inward with a spark




    Submitted on 2007-03-23 08:30:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      another love topic..your a very romantic guy..

    this was my favorite part:

    winds gather my lovers tongue
    and weather can be a sure sign
    of things to come
    so let's just think of turbulence
    as another way that passion
    lets us know that it's storming inside

    very nice write!
    although your the only one that I've read that mostly writes proses..and not poetry...*cough*
    | Posted on 2007-03-24 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      love is the tireless beauty. tho i will be glad to see what eles you can do

    shadow
    | Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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