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    dots Submission Name: I'll get over youdots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 28
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 613
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 168



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    dotsI'll get over youdots
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    My heart's turning to stone
    and my mind's filling with sand.
    My thoughts drown
    and I'm fading
    as I let go of your hand...




    Submitted on 2007-03-23 12:35:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is very nice writing. You got me interested but left me unfulfilled... as you realize with your "incomplete" description. I want more!

    I can envision many situations that this write can describe in a persons life. So I'm left trying to fill-in the blank space which makes your short piece all the more powerful.

    As I sit and think about it, maybe it is perfect just the way it is... I guess I like that feeling of having the latitude of being able to fill-in the volume of images myself.

    I like short but strong, powerful image pieces like this one.

    I will make it a point to read some more of your work. This was a joy to read.

    Dennis
    | Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by Daokao | [ Reply to This ]


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