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    dots Submission Name: Touch medots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 813
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       I met a guy. We stand right next to each other yet we're world's apart...


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    dotsTouch medots
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    You're the dream I had
    but I cant touch your soft reality
    You're the love I smelled
    I'm too far away now for tasting

    Tell me what you think about hoping
    Am I a fool for even trying?
    But can I even try?

    You're the light I felt
    so warm against my tender heartaches
    You're the healing hand
    though limited on pain you take

    Show me what perfection means
    Are your flaws everything I need?
    Flawed you are, perfectly

    Between us lies the glass of truths
    we can hear but cannot touch
    somehow we touched each other from miles away
    and for me, that is enough

    But someday you'll touch me




    Submitted on 2007-03-23 12:47:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I thought "Show me what perfection means
    Are your flaws everything I need?
    Flawed you are, perfectly" was really cool. I liked this poem for it reminded me of those times i have thought intensly about someone and wondered if they were, at that same moment, thinking intensely about me and that somehow they might feel my feelings, even though i was hundreds of miles away from them.
    | Posted on 2007-03-25 00:00:00 | by nomad knight | [ Reply to This ]


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