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Submission Name: Touch me dots

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Author:	lolavie
ASL Info:	23/female/Michigan
Elite Ratio:	3.26 - 70/175/103
Words:	118

Class/Type:	Poetry/Longing
Total Views:	854
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	779

Description:
I met a guy. We stand right next to each other yet we're world's apart...

Touch me dots

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You're the dream I had
but I cant touch your soft reality
You're the love I smelled
I'm too far away now for tasting

Tell me what you think about hoping
Am I a fool for even trying?
But can I even try?

You're the light I felt
so warm against my tender heartaches
You're the healing hand
though limited on pain you take

Show me what perfection means
Are your flaws everything I need?
Flawed you are, perfectly

Between us lies the glass of truths
we can hear but cannot touch
somehow we touched each other from miles away
and for me, that is enough

But someday you'll touch me

Submitted on 2007-03-23 12:47:50 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I thought "Show me what perfection means
Are your flaws everything I need?
Flawed you are, perfectly" was really cool. I liked this poem for it reminded me of those times i have thought intensly about someone and wondered if they were, at that same moment, thinking intensely about me and that somehow they might feel my feelings, even though i was hundreds of miles away from them.

| Posted on 2007-03-25 00:00:00 | by nomad knight | [ Reply to This ]

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