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    dots Submission Name: Natural Spiritdots
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    Author: Acid
    ASL Info:    17/M/Newport, WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 103/159/76
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 729
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       EEK! I'm proud of myself, not overly so, but little by little I'm getting better. So please, do enjoy.


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    dotsNatural Spiritdots
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    The wolven cry burns the night,
    The emerald seas ablaze.
    Within the ashen glade,
    A Spirit dies tonight.

    Fog and haze break upon,
    The mountains bare and bleak.
    A demise beneath the willow world,
    The Spirit dies tonight.

    The lunar light caresses,
    And leaves the world ashutter.
    Break the earth, and flesh asunder,
    Your Spirit dies tonight.

    The water calls,
    The ravens sing.
    A eulogy of sorrow,
    My Spirit died tonight.




    Submitted on 2007-03-23 14:26:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Great imagery here..excellent use of vocabulary..gotta compare feelings with nature of course..very deep..beautiful poem!

    I can say this is your best from your recent poems..
    | Posted on 2007-04-13 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      the bite of the lichen? for even a man who is pure at heart and says his prayers at night can become a wolf when the wolfsbane blooms and the autum moon is bright.

    kudos

    and that was fun even if im wrong

    ~shadow
    | Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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