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    dots Submission Name: A Personal Murderdots
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    Author: Acid
    ASL Info:    17/M/Newport, WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 103/159/76
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsA Personal Murderdots
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    Nightmare wings,
    A feathered void,
    The abyssal crest of blood,
    My pet, my sweet.

    So dark you null the night,
    Too cold to even freeze.
    Your darkness reverts to love,
    You expel the event horizon.

    The blood that courses through you,
    Festers in the sky.
    Bringer but of redemption,
    You deliver the gift of death.

    My pet, my sweet,
    You formless shade of black,
    The symbolistic soul,
    My personal murder.




    Submitted on 2007-03-23 14:32:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      your poems haunt me..
    | Posted on 2007-03-24 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      O.O Wow, that was interesting. It's rare that I read a piece like that. But Im not sure Im quite understanding it . . . maybe you could PM me and explain it . . .
    | Posted on 2007-03-24 00:00:00 | by Ryu Saiashi | [ Reply to This ]
      this entire piece is so drawing, it sucks you in and makes you face the reality of today and how each of us really feels...you did a wonderful job and your word choice was the best i've read in a while...
    | Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by suicidalacts72 | [ Reply to This ]
      aw may your pet be foever in your arms.. some great imagry..

    Nightmare wings,
    A feathered void,
    The abyssal crest of blood,
    My pet, my sweet.

    a truely brilliant nightmare

    shadow dear
    | Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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