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Without


Author: Deep Ace Thinks
ASL Info:    35/M/ Spring, TX
Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 124 /190 /60
Words: 80
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
Total Views: 1213
Average Vote:    4.0000
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Description:


oooh the longing....
will it ever freakin end?????LOL!


Without







Ghostlights were shimmering against the blue,

as time and life were flying by.

Crisp air filled my lungs with dew,

drenched in thoughts of you and I.

An unfinished puzzle left on the floor,

pieces all strewn in the shape of doubt.

Forever wanting just a little more,

until reality decides what we can live without.







AB2007





Submitted on 2007-03-23 16:26:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is nice work! Nice picture, Who is the other person? I like the part *drenched in thoughts of you and I./ An unfinished puzzle left on the floor* A good poem, even if it was a little short.
Keep'em coming

The Poor Man's Poet.
| Posted on 2007-03-24 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
  i really like this...it's a little short but it gives a setting which most people fail to do...
| Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by suicidalacts72 | [ Reply to This ]


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