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    dots Submission Name: The Land of Broken Dreamsdots
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    Author: truthbetold
    ASL Info:    20-f
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 38/45/33
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 801
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 559



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    dotsThe Land of Broken Dreamsdots
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    my ambitions, that have no meaning
    my dreams, they don't matter
    everything i earned in life
    turned to glass and shattered.

    everything i ever loved
    left me in the dust,
    you turned against me
    you--- i no longer trust.

    the land of Broken Dreams
    thoughts lost in darkness
    captivated in anger
    bottled up with stress.

    back inside my mind
    i'm stranded in the past,
    and the little happiness in my life
    i strive to make it last.




    Submitted on 2007-03-23 19:10:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This has to be my favorite piece by you so far at least from what i have read. This is very well written and has some very creative lines. my favorite lines are:
    "everything i earned in life
    turned to glass and shattered."

    "you turned against me
    you--- i no longer trust."

    I feel like i can really relate to it. beautiful piece of work!
    | Posted on 2007-07-05 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. It flowed nicely, and the emotion was portrayed was great. The only thing was the 1st and 3rd stanzas didn't rhyme to well. I can relate to this so well, especially right now. Though, my prolem is my mom. Great poem. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading.

    Saint Razor
    | Posted on 2007-03-25 00:00:00 | by brknprclndol | [ Reply to This ]


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