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World


Author: darkwiccan14
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Class/Type: Story /Serious
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World



Tears roll down her face,
She feels this world is so unorganized,
And she feels shes so out of place,
Her home and her dreams been vandalized,
While every just stands to the side,
They all had denied,
They all had lied,
Saying that,
This world will survive....




Submitted on 2007-03-23 19:40:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  it made my soul soar! lol. It was so good, a deep poem. a sigh came through me at the end (thats good)
| Posted on 2007-05-06 00:00:00 | by VampireMaiden | [ Reply to This ]


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