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    dots Submission Name: Exile my realitydots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Rant/Romance
    Total Views: 679
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    Bytes: 772



    Description:
       sometimes we dream of everything our heart desires and it's funny how in a seconds time the dream seems to end. But your smile fades. The sun appears and youve been awaken to reality...the realm of life you live just to survive...NOT to love....

    anywho, this piece is based off a dream I had last night


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    dotsExile my realitydots
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    Last night I dreamed of a man I barely knew
    I see him time to time just kinda passing through
    But he stopped and stared at me
    He stopped the world with me

    Last night we talked until the sun went down
    He showed me everything around this town
    But then he went away from me
    Because you came to get me

    I woke up from my dream
    and prayed sleep would return
    I tasted what I yearned to taste
    but I still wanted more
    Dreamland wont you open for me
    Exile my reality

    He
    though i know not his name
    He
    nearly drives me insane
    and I forgot to mention all the while
    at the end of my dream--at me he smiled
    Oh, He




    Submitted on 2007-03-24 14:59:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice poem
    | Posted on 2007-03-24 00:00:00 | by shanu | [ Reply to This ]


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