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    dots Submission Name: the lambent arterydots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Prose/Longing
    Total Views: 445
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1006



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    dotsthe lambent arterydots
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    i suffer curly waves of inner longing
    cork-screwed etchings on my deep eye
    the liquid night moves through me
    wilted dolls favoring the collapse

    i search the room for my sacred seraph
    my angel vested in warm vellum
    bejeweled in intricate heavens
    like a heron embedded in my palm

    if others could see the lambent artery
    the twisting cobble i do breathe
    graceful wonders i do tread upon
    they'd surely reinvent their skins

    i engage her many tortuous pores
    a pirate of touching fingers undoing
    minute corridors into her complex ears
    waking in her twisted hair

    i am programmed devoutly
    whispers laying secrets in her mind
    i will always compass to her
    my puzzle filled with fire

    i am the tenor of her inmost light
    the cockle of her liberated heart
    now more than ever
    letting what must be slipped slip




    Submitted on 2007-03-24 23:48:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ooh beauty flowing across the page, like silk sheets accross smooth skin. darling you leave me breathless
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