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    dots Submission Name: A simple glancedots

    Author: Kube
    ASL Info:    24/M/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.93 - 64/56/32
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 820
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       I don't really do the whole love thing so tell me what you think.

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    dotsA simple glancedots

    We have met before
    You are the one from my dreams
    The one who’s hair does not need light to shine
    Your eyes put my body at ease;
    With a single glance you have captured me
    I have searched for you
    Connect with me
    Fill this broken heart with love once more

    There’s a soft light that surrounds you
    I want to be your light
    You have taken so much pain away
    Yet we haven’t even spoken
    I can see our hands together;
    Walking though life
    You could make me grow old;
    Make me want to grow old
    Love me.

    Submitted on 2007-03-25 01:07:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice poem, I know how you feel.
    | Posted on 2007-03-28 00:00:00 | by sir james | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn cube your wearing the same love streightjacket I'm wearing, its there somewhere
    and it wants to get out but hasnt been kicked quite hard enough....

    You know, it might work if you try that whole... well you know,, you [censored] you ripped my heart out and ate it before my eyes thing,,
    and then follow on with
    "With a single glance you have captured me"

    and then after
    "Fill this broken heart with love once more"
    another Tourette's moment before....
    "There’s a soft light that surrounds you"

    And then perhaps after
    "Love me"
    another outburst?

    Oh cube I'm so sorry and please take anything I say with a grain of salt, because I know you really want to try the soft mushy thing,, Like I do as well,,, and its not easy, I know.
    Di offers shoulder and says there there it'll come it'll come,,,, she's out there some where and she can hear you she just hasnt bumped into you yet.
    Much love Kube

    PS,, but all in all its not bad, but it is restrained, much like my work really.

    | Posted on 2007-03-25 00:00:00 | by Andz | [ Reply to This ]

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