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    dots Submission Name: chilleddots
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    Author: Ghetto_King
    ASL Info:    19 m ft. lauderdale
    Elite Ratio:    0.76 - 4/33/54
    Words: 280
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 717
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1645



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    Chilled
    As I take my ice wrap tongue making a trail from top down
    Blowing cold air, as I kiss your neck sending shivers down
    Continuing my trail with a tour of your chest
    From the warmth of your body ice grows smaller and melts
    As tongue motions switch from right to left
    Passion pressing against you’re lungs leaving you short of breath
    Chilled
    Taking another piece of ice as I continue on my route
    Moving my tongue kissing down going too regions south
    As I leave you in ga, so much so that moans fly from mouth
    In and out your thighs with the ice my route
    Chilled
    As I come to the place where life god brings
    Now with my tongue I play this love song an with glee you sing
    From solid to liquid the ice change
    Converting my tongue to a sponge now the stage
    Back and forth your playing ground I slowly run
    Taking my slow time with every motion increasing your fun
    As tongue motions move from slow too fast and your insides run
    As pleasure becomes vase leaving you short of breathe and stunned
    As I move deeper between thighs with my tongue your body I read
    As you play in passion paradise and total bliss is seen
    As the cold air brings your body too a point of ice-cold ecstasy leaving you chilled
    Sending you to cloud nine the feeling every bit real
    Now with the feeling time is slowed
    In this icy passion your surround and roll
    With a piece of frozen water begin this icy slope
    Leaving your body chilled as the story goes






    Submitted on 2007-03-25 19:47:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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