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    dots Submission Name: As We Laydots

    Author: Ghetto_King
    ASL Info:    19 m ft. lauderdale
    Elite Ratio:    0.76 - 4/33/54
    Words: 298
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       as we lay graphic sexual real

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    dotsAs We Laydots

    As you fall back on too a rose petales filled bed head cradle in hand
    As legs part like the red sea and inside you apart of me has ran
    In tingle now flesh on flesh as tongues join making that which was two, one
    As I move with the rhythm of beats, that echoís through the room as music moves and run
    As I tap your walls and inner g spot like a pass lover returned
    As you bathed in your passion as it burns through your flesh
    As sweat drips from your body now you passions guest
    As moans travels from your lips to mine as in tingle moans sound
    Now through the threshold of pleasures door I move
    As position are change you biting your lip knowing, your g spot is soothe
    Now left to right circular motions of pelvis stimulate pleasure glands as I move with my hips
    Switching our positions as you stand with your back dipped
    Grabbing your waist as I slide deep inside you exploring caverns and caves
    As I move in and out you with ever so much grace
    As the simple delight of your body I taste
    Using my tongue as my paint brush as I work magic on your canvas
    As paint drips on the tip of my tongue itís landing
    As the wall becomes your holder as I now push inside you slow and hard
    Trying too weakening you screams by turning into your shoulder
    As your eyes roll back and legs get weak
    From the wall back too the bed we creep
    One last moan and elevation of speech
    As you climax five times over short of breath and beat
    As you fall into my arms and my chest fast asleep
    As We Lay

    Submitted on 2007-03-25 20:20:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very descriptive and decent, although, you used "greet" a bit too much, I would say. Also, try to expand upon your vocabulary.
    | Posted on 2007-03-26 00:00:00 | by Tristamus | [ Reply to This ]

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