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As We Lay

Author: Ghetto_King
ASL Info:    19 m ft. lauderdale
Elite Ratio:    0.76 - 4 /33 /54
Words: 298
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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As We Lay

As you fall back on too a rose petales filled bed head cradle in hand
As legs part like the red sea and inside you apart of me has ran
In tingle now flesh on flesh as tongues join making that which was two, one
As I move with the rhythm of beats, that echo’s through the room as music moves and run
As I tap your walls and inner g spot like a pass lover returned
As you bathed in your passion as it burns through your flesh
As sweat drips from your body now you passions guest
As moans travels from your lips to mine as in tingle moans sound
Now through the threshold of pleasures door I move
As position are change you biting your lip knowing, your g spot is soothe
Now left to right circular motions of pelvis stimulate pleasure glands as I move with my hips
Switching our positions as you stand with your back dipped
Grabbing your waist as I slide deep inside you exploring caverns and caves
As I move in and out you with ever so much grace
As the simple delight of your body I taste
Using my tongue as my paint brush as I work magic on your canvas
As paint drips on the tip of my tongue it’s landing
As the wall becomes your holder as I now push inside you slow and hard
Trying too weakening you screams by turning into your shoulder
As your eyes roll back and legs get weak
From the wall back too the bed we creep
One last moan and elevation of speech
As you climax five times over short of breath and beat
As you fall into my arms and my chest fast asleep
As We Lay

Submitted on 2007-03-25 20:20:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very descriptive and decent, although, you used "greet" a bit too much, I would say. Also, try to expand upon your vocabulary.
| Posted on 2007-03-26 00:00:00 | by Tristamus | [ Reply to This ]

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