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Melted Truth


Author: Seductress
ASL Info:    22/F/Philly
Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 12 /13 /15
Words: 297
Class/Type: Poetry /What you did
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this is what happens when your chocolate melts, its symbolic of something deeper just like the poem Chocolate I wrote, that this is remarking on after the good times stop rolling :-


Melted Truth



Ever wonder why what tastes so delicious
Isn't that nutritious for ya!?
But you turn your eyes...
Just to feel how it satisfies your body

Man oh man if I could just take it all back
The many days I had that candy attack
Knocking on my door... looming in my mind
Ooo there's jus not enough time to get me some chocolate!

There weren't enough hours in the day
For what I could say about that treat
Dang chocolate I'd give anything for you
I would cherish and adore you because I just can't ignore you

But the day has come that this sugar high comes to an end
I'm just so sick of it I must give in
I can't pretend any longer
With every minute my pain grows stronger though

To have you and hold you
But with all that I've told you I must let you go
Having a peice of chocolate and none of the rest
I just can't settle for second best anymore

You used to seem so smooth and dapper
A perfect package in your wrapper
But in the sun your trapped in the light
Your perfect image melted and it's just not right anymore

You used to be such a delectable treat
Now it's melted dark chocolate that tastes bittersweet
I can't believe such a thing could happen to chocolate
But you know what it's the melted truth and it hurts

But I've known for a while
While my face wore that smile
That one day I would be done because I wasn't the only one that you did this to
And I can't keep you any more after you've melted in the sun- dang chocolate, you used to be sweet




Submitted on 2007-03-25 23:04:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i have to disagree with u.....melted chocolate is another kind of bliss....
| Posted on 2007-03-26 00:00:00 | by Sanjhana | [ Reply to This ]


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