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    dots Submission Name: but inside im screamingdots

    Author: iscreamicry
    ASL Info:    20/f/nsw/australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.47 - 34/26/24
    Words: 236
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 989
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1541

       i was down and out and ready to quit...

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    dotsbut inside im screamingdots

    I try and crawl
    The black's closing in
    I'm flailing and drowning
    Inside my soul of sin

    I scratch and i claw
    i kick and i bite
    i know it, i feel it,
    Im losing the fight

    But inside im screaming
    crying rivers of blood
    But inside im screaming
    drowing in my flood

    The blanket is over me
    my mind is now blank
    I can see it now
    the pit into which i sank

    I struggle and reach
    my bile is rising, ready to go
    I gasp and i scream
    The gun is ready to blow

    But inside im screaming
    crying rivers of tears
    But inside im screaming
    drowned by my fears

    I'll smile and I'll laugh
    you wont know what I do
    A happy facade
    Is presented to you

    I'll hide the harm
    i subject myself to
    so my go lucky side
    is presented to you

    but inside im screaming
    crying rivers of shame
    but inside im screaming
    trying to win lifes game

    my make up hides the tears
    my smile hides the frown
    my clothes hide the scars
    my piercings make me the clown

    no one sees my pain
    nor do they see the tears
    Never notice my eyes
    theyre hidden by my fears

    But inside im screaming
    crying tears of self hate
    but inside im screaming
    despairing my fate.

    Submitted on 2007-03-26 06:59:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this poem is incredible. i love it. your poem flowed perfect. it has so much emotion
    | Posted on 2007-07-06 00:00:00 | by Nessyjane | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, i thought this one was amazing, and in the thrid stanza i think there's a spelling error:

    "But inside im screaming
    crying rivers of blood
    But inside im screaming
    drowing in my flood"

    i think you mean to write drowning, but otherwise, i thought this was really good.
    | Posted on 2007-07-05 00:00:00 | by save me | [ Reply to This ]
      i can't believe no ones said anything about this yet...it's amazing...keep writting and let me know when you write another...i love you word use and descrptions...very vivid and real...love it...
    | Posted on 2007-03-26 00:00:00 | by suicidalacts72 | [ Reply to This ]

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