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    dots Submission Name: Take from medots

    Author: Kube
    ASL Info:    24/M/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.93 - 64/56/32
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 563
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsTake from medots

    Take what I have left
    Itís just a thought
    Take it!
    I need not your blessing
    It will grow again
    Your eyes say so much
    My eyes donít care

    So simple yet so powerful
    Bother me?
    Your thoughts bring me to hell
    I rise
    But there you are again
    Feeding on me

    Where is your heart?
    Have mine;
    Just take it
    Be better for your own

    Submitted on 2007-03-26 08:33:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yes be the better person and give.

    give ur heart, let them feed.

    its all good.

    i digg the end lines yo


    | Posted on 2007-03-26 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem really made me think it was really deep... I love the word play... very nice :)
    | Posted on 2007-03-26 00:00:00 | by CaughtRedhanded | [ Reply to This ]
      Dude that was deep. IDK what else to say...
    | Posted on 2007-03-26 00:00:00 | by bigothgurl | [ Reply to This ]

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