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One final good-bye

Author: Semper Fidelis
ASL Info:    22/Male/ouahu, Hawaii
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Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Misc
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Some of you might now know that I am going into the navy in a year. Um...This is sort of my way of thanking you guys for all the feed back I've gotten. And don't worry, this isn't my last poem. lol. Hope I bring a tear to someone's eye.

One final good-bye

The tears caress my cheek-
as I see those who cry-
for me-
as my life changes-

No more saturdays-
spent at the park-
or friday nights jammin'-
to metal-

No more warm kisses-
from the one I loved-
No more watching-
the sun set on the river-

You know, it's funny-
how life chisels it's path-
One day your a kid-
the next, a kid at heart-

How can we really tell-
when we're ready to grow up?
Leave the nest, and fend-
for ourselves-

This is my last good bye-
to all of you my friends-
Thank you for the words-
and your spelling corrections-

Thanks for the Ideas and-
subjects on which to write-
I'm glad that you liked my work-
and I will try to keep it coming-

Submitted on 2004-06-10 17:52:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  well i have to say this was really nice adn a year is a ways away so you still have plenty of time for good byes. you are doing a great thing and ir will make you grow up big time for sure. my husband is in the air force and loves it. i have a friend whos husband that is in the navy and loves it. so more power to you. go write and we will me you but after basic training and tech school it will be like a normal day. you will be great. have a good day lia
| Posted on 2004-06-10 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
  I didn't have tears, but they welled, and I giggled at the "spelling corrections" bit. I don't know what else to say about this, other than it was your only mushy piece so far but its good, and a sweet goodbye, to people, that you feel like you know, because you share some of the deepest infestation of your soul with them, and trust me, you deteriorated me with it. I love all of your work, and I am begging for more to come. keep them coming boy, you know I will always be here to comment, critique, whatever, but mostly, just love the words I read. keep it up, and reconsider the navy, lol, just kidding, if its really what you want, like I said before, if we meet, sometime, I'll know it.
| Posted on 2004-06-10 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]

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