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i wish it was enough


Author: Sanjhana
ASL Info:    21/f/India
Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 118 /154 /45
Words: 108
Class/Type: Poetry /The pain inside
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i wish it was enough



how do i make these tears stop
and bring you to a smile
i love you so much
but i know that isn't enough

this dark cloud around you
needs to disappear
my words are meant to sooth
yet they come out all wrong
i love you so much
but i know that isn't enough

your silence screams out to me
can't you just give me your pain?
i feel helpless when i'm with you
its ironic cos you are my strenght
i wish the world for you
it is you who gave me mine
i love you so much
i wish it was enough




Submitted on 2007-03-26 11:50:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i'm not gonna worry about structure coz Dennis has gone over it. but i like it, it's something i can really relate to coz it's how i felt with my last bf. well done
Regards, Kalinda
| Posted on 2007-03-26 00:00:00 | by Kalinda | [ Reply to This ]
  Got the concept, a picture painted, but it dosent rhyme, some flaws here and there, but overall, u got the concept of longing for someone, longing to take away someone's worries, hurt, and pain.

It's good :) but it just dosent rhyme that well :)

Keep up the work, keep on writing!!

God Bless
Dennis :)
| Posted on 2007-03-26 00:00:00 | by StylerDen | [ Reply to This ]


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