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    dots Submission Name: Acid In My Blooddots

    Author: Acid
    ASL Info:    17/M/Newport, WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 103/159/76
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 860
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       Ooo... I'm kinda proud of this one. I actually like this peice. I hope you all do too!

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    dotsAcid In My Blooddots

    From the Bittercup I drink deep,
    It echos through my soul.
    In trembling hands I keep,
    My demise within a bowl.

    Screaming through my veins,
    Acid burns down to my core.
    Deliverence in my pains,
    So tangible you can pour.

    Draining from the sky,
    Poison tumbles down.
    Bleaching skin will die,
    The rest of you will drown.

    Claws are reaching up through,
    The cage down in the well.
    Acid coming up anew,
    So much I may expel.

    Venom, inky black,
    Darker than my heart.
    Oozing through a crack,
    Tearing me apart.

    Stitches slowly ripping,
    I guess It's going to kill.
    Now the poison's gripping,
    And drinking in it's fill.

    Submitted on 2007-03-26 12:03:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoyed this one..oh dark poems! i love i love..the rhyming flows quite well, paints its dark picture in my head, and overall wonderful..

    you should be proud!
    | Posted on 2007-04-13 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm...to say that I like it would be an understatement. Dark and quite macabre, decorated with a simple yet fitting rhyming scheme and hardbound imagery with lust for the obscure. Intriguing. Do you by any chance find yourself in this piece?
    | Posted on 2007-04-11 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]

    | Posted on 2007-03-26 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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