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    dots Submission Name: The Perfect Guydots
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    Author: CaughtRedhanded
    ASL Info:    18/F/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 94/41/22
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 822
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Description:
       I wrote this a long time ago right after I met a late boyfriend...


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    dotsThe Perfect Guydots
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    Can you please...
    just curess my hair,
    and embrace me in your loving arms,
    without a care?

    Can you please...
    pick me up,
    and kiss my lips,
    Maybe there will be room for afew loving grips.

    Can you please...
    look straight in my eyes,
    touch my face<center>
    and take me away from this place?

    Can you tame,
    the wildness in my heart,
    that has tore so many guys apart.

    Can you love me
    with all your heart;
    and treat me like a Goddess from the start?

    Make me love you
    I open this heart of mine.
    So please can you...

    be the perfect guy???




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    ||| Comments |||
      I think every girl is looking for the perfect guy. No one can find one, though
    Don't give up just b/c you can't find him. He's out there somewhere.
    Great poem, very catchy and excellently written. I've said it before and I'll say it again, you are a very great writer.
    Angel
    | Posted on 2008-08-29 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]
      We all want the perfect guy... I thought I had him but the illuaion was, thankfully, shattered. Good luck. :)
    | Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngelKat | [ Reply to This ]
      Don't we all want the perfect guy? Good luck finding him.
    Your poem is really good btw:)
    | Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by T. Garrett | [ Reply to This ]


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