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    dots Submission Name: silly little dreamdots
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    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Rant/Misc
    Total Views: 868
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 840



    Description:
       I don't know what the hell goes on in my head, I just cant understand where this comes from. first thing I've even attempted writing in months. shred it to pieces if you care or pass it by what ever.


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    dotssilly little dreamdots
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    Could this just be a dream
    a silly little fantasy
    then eyes kept closed
    the way it should be

    peace comes
    in subtle ways
    for this death
    do not grieve

    sun can't burn
    such skin
    porcelain and ever cold
    no worries upon the brow

    just a ghost cast a drift
    wondering which way
    the wind will blow
    how it should be

    this is just a dream
    take control of the fantasy
    to be lucid is to be free

    It's never clear
    what will come
    when living on physically

    all pretenses fall away
    all pretenses fall
    just a ghost
    a castaway

    drift on daydreamer
    you've got it right
    theres more than can be seen




    Submitted on 2007-03-26 21:13:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this is a really cool piece. The language seems to convey the feeling to which it is describing. I enjoyed reading this.
    | Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by nomad knight | [ Reply to This ]


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