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    dots Submission Name: Lostdots
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    Author: almostgrownup
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 2/2/3
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Where have all the real people gone?
    Were they abducted, or abstracted
    Erased from the world that becomes
    More slippery each day under my feet

    I used to see smiles on the faces
    And waves from the passers by
    All people do now is sniff coke and get high.
    Watching, waiting for the time to fly by
    Staring like zombies into the sky.
    All I want to ask is why?

    Did your parents neglect you
    Do your friends disrespect you
    What do you go through
    To make you so see-through
    Like all the others around you
    You've never met the real you.

    So join the stone army, marching in two's
    You can just do all the things that they do
    Think what they think
    You lost your voice in one blink




    Submitted on 2007-03-27 00:00:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      wow..... i like it.... it explains how i picture the word some thimes... nice!
    TerriK
    | Posted on 2007-04-03 00:00:00 | by yamifox | [ Reply to This ]
      great power in such few words
    | Posted on 2007-03-30 00:00:00 | by roc_ster | [ Reply to This ]


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