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    dots Submission Name: doze editingdots
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    Author: honus
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 90/96/32
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsdoze editingdots
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    I squash thoughts
    like flies
    like dreams
    and they are all the same

    a passive blend
    when all are one
    and one is
    what it shall be

    this is the only
    true sanity
    called up
    through meager exhaustion

    dream existence
    is butterflies
    in the dragon's mouth:
    that last sentence you read

    just before you're head
    dipped and your eyes
    slammed shut;
    and as you re-read the last line

    you realise that
    your'e dreaming the words
    onto the page




    Submitted on 2007-03-27 01:21:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well, I'd like to know if the editing mistakes in the poem are purposeful or not. If they are, I'd like to see more of them... to really bring out the idea of doze editing. If they aren't purposeful, then fix them. Otherwise... go all the way. Make the editing attrocious.
    | Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by DavidHirt | [ Reply to This ]


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