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    dots Submission Name: Betrayal...dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 223
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 854
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1385



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    dotsBetrayal...dots
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    Stop stop …
    Look at you
    LOOK

    Graveling begging … at my feet..

    I long to give no mercy but I could never
    Although you never gave me mercy

    Ripping off my clothes
    Telling me these lies so you can have your way with me

    Hoping and pray now that time has taken its toll
    I do not mention a word of what has happened

    You told me you love me
    You told me that’s how you show your love

    At age thirteen I thought just maybe
    Yeah,
    That its okay

    But time has proven you wrong
    Yet again you’ve used me

    As others have

    How ironic you’re worried of boys…
    Men, with a higher moral status than yourself
    Men whom actually have respect for women to use me

    Worried I may not spear your life..
    You kiss my ass

    Telling me all I want to hear now.
    As if I can’t see what you’re doing

    Don’t act so blinded…
    Stop pretending you know nothing of what I speak…

    You my… Fr..frii…Friend
    Have are hurt me to great…

    I have decided being with you
    Is not in my best interest…

    So please accept this farewell
    So long...

    Hope to never cross paths again!!!!




    Submitted on 2007-03-27 02:07:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice.... Did he really kiss your ass , only kidding. These are really great, and again, I really enjoy reading stuff like this (and I dont read much! Only song lyrics and poetry, oh yeah! and sheet music)
    | Posted on 2007-04-23 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]


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