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    dots Submission Name: Tears of a Clown- part 5dots
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    Author: wilted_flower
    ASL Info:    22 f uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 42/56/28
    Words: 434
    Class/Type: Story/Depressed
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       This part isn't as good but please take a look and let me know what you think. Hope you enjoy it. Fleur xxx


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    dotsTears of a Clown- part 5dots
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    Walking through the door she hoped that there were no visible marks, she’d managed to convince him that nothing was wrong anymore, that the self harm had stopped. “Evening sweetheart!” She was shocked at how sing song her voice sounded in the bare kitchen and it brought a smile of satisfaction to her lips, she could do it, she could play this part to perfection. She leant up and planted a kiss on his cheek; she knew that now he was home it would all be Ok, her knight in shining armour had returned and he would keep her safe from herself. “I love you…” she whispered gently in his ear. She didn’t love him really, she needed him, like a child needs a comfort blanket and deep down she was aware that Tom knew it; he just didn’t want to admit it. Tom could smell the soap on her skin but he convinced himself that the make up wasn’t hiding anything, that the long sleeves weren’t disguising new cuts; taking her hand he raised it to his lips and it was then that her knuckles caught his eye…
    “What’s this? Where’s this bruise come from?” He stood for a moment just holding her hand and looking at the purple marks on her ivory skin, it had been months since he’d seen anything like this and now here were the marks, vivid as scarlet blood on snow white sheets. Dropping her hand he turned back to the kettle and his hand shook as he started to pour the water into the chipped mugs, but Lilly had had years of practice at this and within two seconds she had already formulated the lie in her head; “I did it at the party today and I didn’t do it on purpose, I landed funny after doing a cartwheel and banged my hand on a door frame. Not that I expect YOU to believe me, you probably think I’m lying! Seriously what’s the point in ‘us’ if you don’t trust me?!” She’d done it, she’d questioned their relationship and she knew that he’d back down. “I’m sorry love, of course I trust you.” Lilly had got away with it and she sulkily accepted the mug of tea he offered as a peace offering with a sense of triumph, Lilly clown extraordinaire, the great pretender now had a new act for her repertoire; and it was that of the loving, honest fiancé. Tom didn’t know that he was being played and that’s how Lilly planned to keep it.




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      so ive been reading these and i think they are great...i keep looking everyday to see if you have added something new cuz i really like to read them...this one lacked some of the stuff that the others had but hey its still amazing and it keeps me coming back to read it...keep it up

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    | Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by crazyinsane | [ Reply to This ]
      it is nice , but it lacks something , the sense and feelings , for all I see here is a simple story , not fully written from the heart , am sorry , but at this point of the story , you lost your reader , if it was a published story , I know you can make it better , I trust you on that < a little tip , don't rewrite , but continue , and this time get your reader back , with the next part , get him within your grasp again > 'kay?!
    | Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by Squall Leon Hea | [ Reply to This ]


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