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    dots Submission Name: Your Promisesdots

    Author: The Gadfly
    ASL Info:    52/M/Moreno Valley, CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 1048/1348/375
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 571
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       The promise is forgiveness from the burden of sin and eternal life.

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    dotsYour Promisesdots

    Caught in the middle of one more catastrophe,
    it's not Your face, Lord, or some sign I long to see.
    Though I would tremble if I felt Your slightest touch,
    no kindness shown to me could ever mean as much

    As what You promised on the cross, the day You died,
    one thief, forever, would be welcomed by your side,
    No condemnation for his hopeless life of sin.
    As his reward, You paid his debt and took him in.

    For deep within his soul yet searching would reveal
    The buried treasure he could never hope to steal.
    Found in Your promises, a life he never knew.
    That was, until the day, He asked for help from You.

    Trapped in a sudden storm upon a raging sea,
    Twelve men, as one, cried out, "Lord, will you not save me?!"
    Yet with a word from You, the wind and waves died out.
    No lack of faith could help them turn their ship about.

    Here deep within the troubled waters of my soul
    I need a captain who is sure to take control.
    A steady hand upon my life to guide me through.
    I claim Your promises and ask for help from You.

    You asked me to believe Your promises were true.
    I claim Your promises and ask for help from You.

    The Gadfly

    Submitted on 2007-03-27 07:39:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    Firtst, I thought it a terrible thing to have 33 views and no comments on this poem. You wright well, and apart from any diffrences we have on theology, I respect your work.

    This is a good example of your dominant themes. The message is clear. It has a very real feel. I like the human touches, the acceptance of God as your all and still the request for help. Help that you know will be given, even before you ask. :)

    You end three of the verses with the same words, help from You. I wonder if those should fall into a pattern. It is not required, but you might want to play with it.

    Nice work.

    | Posted on 2007-05-20 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]

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