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    dots Submission Name: May Your Lies Rest In Peicedots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 667
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1197



    Description:
       This Goes Out To All The People Who Spend Their Lives Making Up Bullshit So People Can Feel Sorry For You


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    dotsMay Your Lies Rest In Peicedots
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    teenagers
    fragile hearts
    blame each other
    for the whole world falling apart

    wanting to b apart of something
    dark and scary
    they change their appearance
    finish life without caring

    dress in black
    to hide them selfs
    they r not fooling anyone
    they dont really need help

    slice the wrist
    tell a friend
    claim ur depressed
    claim u want life to end

    not a clue
    whats in the Gothic mind
    taking advantage of everything
    claiming to have thoughts of suicide

    these morbid children
    are not what they seem
    everyday after school
    they sit at home watching MTV

    they stare at the stars
    wishing that was them
    the didn't think they could make it
    so they decided to find new friends

    smiling on the inside
    from all the attention they get
    thats all they wanted
    to appear different from the rest

    there will be a day
    their publicity cuts go to deep
    then their appearance wont matter
    may there lies rest in piece




    Submitted on 2007-03-27 09:02:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem could use alittle work you really need to use puctuation it make the poem more dramatic... But other than that it's very deep... I love the way you talk about wishing to be stars and watching mtv... great!
    | Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by CaughtRedhanded | [ Reply to This ]


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