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    dots Submission Name: You Dont Understanddots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 631
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsYou Dont Understanddots
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    My hands on the trigger
    I can easily let it go
    i can think of what youve done to me
    and the feelings i could never show

    look at me
    these eyes are always filled with tears
    im not going to punish you for your mistake
    because i know you know how it feels

    i know you know how it feels
    to cry your self to sleep
    to put on a show for everyone
    and still you meet defeat

    I know you know how it feels
    to want the world to end
    to want to rewind time
    and make certain events not exist

    i know you know what it likes
    to be stabbed in the back
    to offer someone one thing
    and then lose everything u had

    i know u know how it feels
    when your praying on your knees
    begging god to take your life
    then wonder if hes really listening

    i know you know how it is
    when you think you have it all
    you couldnt lead a better life
    but even angels have to fall

    i know you know how it feels
    to lose everything at hand
    i know you know how it feels
    but you dont understand




    Submitted on 2007-03-27 09:14:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i just wanted to say that you are a really good writer. i felt like you were talk directly to me through your poem. ~T.
    | Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by T. Garrett | [ Reply to This ]
      great i just couldnt read enough you are good do keep it up but on close scrutiny check your spellings
    | Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good... love your writing style and your word play you are a great writter...
    | Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by CaughtRedhanded | [ Reply to This ]


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