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    Author: 777sacrites777
    ASL Info:    19/f/ TX baby!
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 302/166/70
    Words: 238
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 266
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1554



    Description:
       to a so-called "friend"


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    oh you..
    you remind me of how far we go back,
    and how many memories we have..
    you manipulate my mind.
    just so i will help you through your problems.
    and then what??
    once things are back to normal
    and you're having better days,
    i'm cast aside again...
    left for another rainy day
    when you need a shoulder to lean on,
    when your other friends just won't understand,
    when all the others will only judge you.
    you use me.
    you abuse me.
    and though i know you realize what you do to me,
    you don't even care.
    you continue this charade.
    i'm set up on a shelf,
    ignored until further notice.
    everytime something just down right tragic happens in your life,
    something too big for your other friends to handle,
    you run to me.
    and just as soon as i help you resolve this dilema,
    you drop me again.
    you completely exile me like i'm no one...
    just a figment of your imagination,
    like you're better than me.
    well guess the hell what??
    you can quit pretending now,
    you're not fooling ANYONE.
    i'm through putting up with this whole fake friend act,
    pick which one you're gonna be
    because i'm tired of dealing with your two-faced bullshit.
    to hell with you.
    i've got my own problems.
    i don't want to carry your burdens any longer.
    screw you.




    Submitted on 2007-03-27 10:29:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very angry. i could feel the anger that you were feeling. we have all been there. when someone tries to act like a "friend" but they are nothing more than a selfish, inconsiderate prick. only do they be your friend when they need something. though, it was not bad, i think that your pieces that rhyme read better. i am not sure if you did it on purpose, cause it does give the poem a kind of angrier vibe. well, keep writing and take care.
    | Posted on 2007-09-29 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]


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