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Author: siradrian
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Words: 50
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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The real me?



Holding back
still on track
make the crack
take it back.

My mind's my own
Let no one in
else lose identity
or expose
self in naked pose.

Decades past
remain the same
neutral gaze
toil within
shuttered out
to best loved
looking in.

Submitted on 2007-03-27 11:03:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hello there Sir A.Been a while.I like the randomness (should there be a hyphen?)of this one,mismatched verses give it a uniqueness.I don't really get the last bit though-the <to best loved looking in> bit.Care to elaborate?Does it mean the speaker (you?) loves himself best or that he is merely an introvert?
Regards as always
| Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by Asakura Cowboy | [ Reply to This ]

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