Bruises by the Change

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Author:	the Change
ASL Info:	20/F/Brasil
Elite Ratio:	6.39 - 11/9/7
Words:	118

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	646
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Bruises

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Oh, how blissful it is to say I have changed!
Does it matter if it was for the best or the worst?
Does it matter if the rot in me remains the same?
I have changed, and—joy!—you cannot treat me as you did.
Oh, how deliciously it melts upon my tongue!
Does it matter if it will roll bitterly about my mouth?
I have changed, and it matters not how exactly.
The point has been made, and the book has been closed.
Time has not ignored me as the world has.
Whether it has wrinkled or favored me, how pointless a thought!
I have not been left out or passed by.
As you have changed, so have I.

Submitted on 2007-03-27 16:37:24 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I really adore this poem. I feel like I can relate to this attitude, this feeling in a way. There was a time in my life that I was changing in so many ways just to show people that I wasn't who they thought I was - I didn't fit their label anymore. Some of the changes were for the worst, but I didn't care at the time. I just wanted to show them that I was different - that they were wrong. I'm not sure if that's where you're coming from on this or not, though!

I'm really curious about your inspiration for this poem. It seems so resentful. At first I thought it was just a general resentment - being ignored by the world, invisible to everyone. Personally, I felt that general sort of resentment. But then I wondered, is it targeted? "As you have changed, so have I." As if someone else changed first and their change was hurtful one. I'm sitting here, actually working up scenarios in my head that might fit this poem! I think that's why I like it so much; it's just intriguing. I want to know more about it.

Also very beautifully written!
| Posted on 2007-03-29 00:00:00 | by pick a locke | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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