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    dots Submission Name: Attendancedots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 24
    Class/Type: Personal Quotes/Love
    Total Views: 442
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 138



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       I miss you :(


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    dotsAttendancedots
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    Your presence said hello
    Your absence said goodbye
    At least when you were tardy
    I knew you were on your way to me...




    Submitted on 2007-03-28 00:30:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "I knew you were on your to me..."

    I take it that should have been

    "I knew you were on your way to me..."

    Dontcha just hate typos'n'stuff.

    I like it. As I've said on here before, I like short, succinct and bullsh!t free verse. Anyone can throw a million words at something and make some stick.

    The skill is in the edit, or in the precision of the verse.

    Nice one.
    | Posted on 2007-03-28 00:00:00 | by Ben Gunn | [ Reply to This ]


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