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    dots Submission Name: It's Storydots

    Author: rubymoon
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 155/162/91
    Words: 248
    Class/Type: Story/Longing
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       A rememberance

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    dotsIt's Storydots

    Love hurts and takes away your pain,
    It only know how to give,
    Or use you for its own gain,
    But still we partake of its sweet gift.

    We forget and regret,
    But still it is patience with us,
    It is bitter sweet in regret
    We are but us.

    Out of jealous love,
    An ill-fated couple met,
    And fell in love,
    The ending only pain and suffering meet.

    Child forged of heaven and hell,
    Given a solemn duty,
    Ring of the sad mournful bell,
    Allow lovers to forget is its duty.

    In the background,
    Can one see it,
    A nameless one who stands on the cold ground,
    No one and nothing comforts it.

    It is of the darkness and the moonbeams,
    Happiest when allowed to be among flowers,
    And to be caressed by the sweet gentle moonís beam,
    Its motherís touch soft as flowers

    It curses the light of day,
    As it is harsh and does not allow it to forget.
    It only hoped for the day,
    The day it will be freed and be able to forget,

    At last come the hopeful day,
    Only to be freed and bonded by another,
    To continue a different duty forever and a day,
    Will it ever be able to be like another?

    To be of flesh and blood?
    Not to be it,
    But one with a name, flesh and blood?
    A real being and no longer an it?

    ~by Iris~

    Submitted on 2007-03-28 08:27:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      An Iris, a more beautiful flower then any flower in any world, but only...when its in the rain...

    Even when its a rain of tears and blood...
    | Posted on 2007-03-29 00:00:00 | by FallenAngelJC | [ Reply to This ]

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