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    dots Submission Name: unknown emotion speaksdots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 916
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 344



    Description:
       i wrote this w/o much thought like i do with most of my pieces...i was feelingt angry when i wrote it......feeedback will be greatly appreciated...what do u think the piece is about???? thanks for reading, lolavie!


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    dotsunknown emotion speaksdots
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    choking on my innocense
    upheaving the truth
    Annihilate all feelings you have

    breathing in your promises
    exhaling my soul
    Im dying as i speak to you

    Clouds soak up my very being
    raining down is my own memories
    Savor each second that pass
    and you too shall see beauty




    Submitted on 2004-06-10 20:41:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I wish I had listened, that I had kept my promises and been here to say those things your poetry told to me. I wish I had told you I loved you one too many times, instead of staying quiet for fear I'd bore you. I wish I had went with you.

    I try to annhilate this feeling, but it is so hard, and so I focus on your art. But all my interpretations are personal now, because I can't separate them no matter how hard I try.

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    I was too afraid, I wanted to savor your beauty to much to tell you how much it hurt me when I read some of your poems. I didn't have the words to explain those that were great, and there were so many that had messages of doubt that it destroyed me inside.
    | Posted on 2004-06-23 00:00:00 | by DocJonathan | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is very nice, but also very confusing. i have no idea what it is about. i am guessing it's about how you feel about someone but are scared to say to then. other than that i am lost. but good write. if you work on it, i think it could be really good
    | Posted on 2004-06-10 00:00:00 | by EdwardScissorhands | [ Reply to This ]


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