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Author: Ben Gunn
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Words: 31
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Going through some old notebooks...urgh....I
make myself cringe.


All those words - what DID they mean?,
I curse myself and the fool I have been.
If you can't write with an inspired insight
Then don't.

Ben Gunn 1985

Submitted on 2007-03-28 10:11:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  its as they say, "I wish I had known what I know now back then"... or something to that extent anyhow. I'm not sure if thats what you were meaning it, although that's the way i have taken it. Nevertheless I like this peice!

| Posted on 2007-04-01 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
  While I can understand and appreciate what you're saying here...
(Believe me... I look back at things I've written in the past 10 years and I cringe, even though I know what I was saying and what I meant, but the style and the rhyme and all just... I just hurts sometimes... or seems trite and pointless. Occasionally I find some gems, but less often then not)
... It reads a bit clunky. It makes my tongue trip over itself.
| Posted on 2007-03-28 00:00:00 | by DavidHirt | [ Reply to This ]

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