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Displacement


Author: Ben Gunn
Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 62 /84 /40
Words: 82
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Description:


Crappy pseudo goth ramblings?,
or valid inability to gain closure?
or a BSc in psychobabble.
You decide...


Displacement



Cutting you away from me,
slicing through sinew and memory,
made bad and laid bare,
Beyond redemption and repair.

Please share -
the moment of release
at once unburdened
and at peace;

but anticipating again
the visceral blade
and inevitable pain.

Years on, it remains
an open wound -
the feelings raw,
the dichotomy as before.

Be my guest -
Let us twist the knife once more.



Ben Gunn 29.09.95 / 2007




Submitted on 2007-03-28 16:10:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  uh read this yet again ... need to COMMENT.. it still leaves me with a sence of wanting more its very good...:)

~!*jackie*!~
| Posted on 2007-04-19 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
  uhh... i like this wanting more.. seems to me as if its too short... grr.. your an amazing writer keep it up!

~!*Jackie*!~
| Posted on 2007-04-01 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
  this reminds me pubesecent/goth poem but if twisting the knife realy turns u on keep cutting brother seya in ther er


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| Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by temporal nights | [ Reply to This ]


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