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    dots Submission Name: Hurtdots
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    Author: lynn marsters
    ASL Info:    20/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 49/61/32
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsHurtdots
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    I hurt myself today to see if I still feel Trent Reznor

    Jittery
    A flood of adrenaline
    An old familiar feeling

    I want it

    I can taste it
    I can feel it
    I can smell it more than anything

    At the merest mention
    In the passing conversation
    The casual comment

    I want it

    My heart dives into my stomach
    I want to ask how much
    I want to ask where and when

    I want

    I thought I was over it
    I thought I was done
    Over a year and I thought I could resist

    I cant

    I want to wake up in the morning
    Tired, crusty, sketchy
    I want to talk till dawn
    About nothing, to no one

    I wanna roll up that bill
    Feel it in my hand
    I want to hurt

    I want it

    Oh, Lord give me a cigarette
    A poor substitute for my intense longing
    Its only a matter of time

    One night bored and stoned
    Hey Lynn, wanna pitch on something?

    Im not going to say no.
    I dont want to
    Im sorry




    Submitted on 2007-03-28 17:32:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well i use to be a cutter and i understand wanting pain in your life, and i do still think it should happen...just not in a physical way like that...but it caught my attention and though i wasn't over joyed by it, it was still worth the comment
    | Posted on 2007-03-28 00:00:00 | by monophobic | [ Reply to This ]
      i really loved this, the way its written and your wording i just really loved it, and well though this isnt much of a comment but yea it was all i had to say.
    | Posted on 2007-03-28 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]


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