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    dots Submission Name: Jacquelyndots
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    Author: Wired
    Elite Ratio:    7.76 - 21/11/16
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 589
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1143



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       A song I wrote for someone very special.


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    dotsJacquelyndots
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    I dry my eyes
    from the fifty pieces of your pain I've seen.
    It's time to decide
    if I'll let you get closer.
    It'd be easier to lie
    and pretend you didn't get inside of me,
    but it's hard to defy.
    your time alone is over.

    It's gonna be fine.
    Leave the pain behind.
    It's gonna be fine.
    Just a matter of time
    and I'll make you mine.

    What kind of man
    could forsake or ever hurt his family?
    I'll do everything I can
    to take away your sorrow.
    And I'll never understand
    why this world has cursed you with this tragedy,
    and why you never ran
    from the fear of tomorrow.

    Now everything's fine.
    Leave that world behind.
    Let our lives combine
    and intertwine
    because now your mine.

    I can see the signs.
    It's your time to shine
    so the stars align.
    Was this plan divine?
    Must be God's design.

    I'm yours and you are mine.




    Submitted on 2007-03-28 18:39:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      aww... i'm speechless.. but you've got me smiling from ear to ear... as you always have me doing! I love you and i appericate everything about you and everything about you! I love you Dave, we're never going to have to be without one another... now that we've found each other..... I love you! I miss you...

    ~!*Jackie*!~
    | Posted on 2007-03-28 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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