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    dots Submission Name: The Comet vs. Jupiterdots
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    Author: tjsmith5
    ASL Info:    28/m/MS
    Elite Ratio:    5.49 - 109/231/124
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 946
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    Description:
       This is about a man who feels an attraction towards a female that is with another man, but a good man.

    The speaker here feels for the woman, but knows that she is better off with the other guy - so instead of making a play for her everyday affections, he wants only for her to remember him well.


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    dotsThe Comet vs. Jupiterdots
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    He is Jupiter
    reddened in the sky
    like a boasting ruby amid the
    moon and satellites.

    Aztecs knew his path
    from which he never deviates
    so now everyone knows
    about Jupiter.

    I am a comet,
    not long lived
    or anointed in the autumn space,
    but brightened white.

    No one knows my path
    zooming past our careless Jupiter,
    the jealous moon
    and all the satellites.

    But in my brevity, I own the sky.

    He is a novel in you.
    I am a poem,
    set dusty on the bookshelf.




    Submitted on 2007-03-28 21:57:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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