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    dots Submission Name: only heartbeats repeatingdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsonly heartbeats repeatingdots

    remember me as if i'm extinct
    like grace glowing through the trees
    i am the island of quiet, reposed in the sun
    always more a ghost than a prayer

    in one green moment we could die
    clever wits confounding years
    discreet ratios of underwater blood
    then it's over

    i sank in the river over a week ago
    and i've yet to resurface
    strolling the boggy marshes by my side
    the murk so thick the weeds can't see me

    when i'm just the missing time
    no more skin afflicting skin with more skin
    and you're left with haunted lips
    romantic eras lost to the water's swell

    what if our last words are too easy
    and your body collapses by itself
    little snapshots of my scented face
    my hair all wrapped in yours

    but i am alive
    and will continue living
    a gathering of birds on your neck
    so loving it's hard to feel when you're not in it

    i amaze the many
    i see their eyes upon me as i only search for yours
    i will be the one thing that sticks
    so natural it's simply heartbeats repeating

    Submitted on 2007-03-29 02:42:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You write so wonderfully. Like something I've never heard of before. You make so many things make sense, even though I dont really get it.. but then somehow I do.
    You have such a beautiful mind, you know that?
    Ha.. I think I am in love with you more than anything!

    Well, thanks for clearing things up for me, lol.

    | Posted on 2007-04-19 00:00:00 | by necrotic | [ Reply to This ]
      brilliant you savant of stanza's. "think of me as if i'm extinct" have you ever thought of writing songs. this one sings in my mind. i can almost hear the undulating piano and sintilating guitar chords. every line seeems to be a piece of art. i genuflect before your geniouse. "i see thir eyes upin me as i only search for yours." ack i can't believe how good his is . for all the workds i feel speachless.
    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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