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    dots Submission Name: How I feeldots

    Author: wilted_flower
    ASL Info:    22 f uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 42/56/28
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       This is written for someone and every word of it is true

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    dotsHow I feeldots

    I find it hard to talk to you and theres a thousand reasons why,
    I open my mouth but no words come- however hard I try,
    You want my friendship to help and chase the blues away
    But I want you to hold me and that's where I want to stay,
    You have to understand that I can never truly be your friend-
    I can't lie in that way and I cannot just pretend,
    I know that you don't want me in the way that I want you,
    But what exactly is it that I'm supposed to do?
    I dreamt the other day that we were walking side by side
    Walking holding hands with nothing left to hide,
    But I know it's just a dream, Just a thought within my heart,
    That it's never gonna happen so I should continue to play my part,
    But instead I'll turn and leave and pray you don't hear me sigh
    And with one last glance I'll walk away and so I'll say goodbye...

    Submitted on 2007-03-29 15:17:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This truly lets out the words that many people in this situation cannot say and that even alone makes this piece brilliant.

    Midway through it drags back a slowed down tone then picks right back up just in time.
    Form is perfect.Makes me feel as though I can absolutely relate.
    It's one of those poems I certainly wouldn't touch again to improve or take away but let it do it's thing in the world.Very cool.

    | Posted on 2011-02-02 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      ......am speechless , you in love? , cause that sure is what someone feels when he is in love and you sure did put it in a great flow , nice and soft , yet sad and desperet , I like it , you really should teach me how to right poetry and stories
    | Posted on 2007-04-13 00:00:00 | by Squall Leon Hea | [ Reply to This ]

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