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    dots Submission Name: The Blame Gamedots
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    Author: WD-40
    ASL Info:    21/F/Bangleby
    Elite Ratio:    0.95 - 206/72/10
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 903
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsThe Blame Gamedots
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    Come
    let us
    play the blame game

    I'll blame you
    and you can blame her
    She will blame him

    We'll play this game
    like no other

    Blame, Lets blame
    We can point a finger or two

    This blame game
    Will always come back to you

    Come
    We'll have a hell lot of fun
    Then when all have been blamed
    as guilty as they are true.

    We'll start the blame game anew




    Submitted on 2007-03-29 17:30:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This poem didn't strike me as special. The only thing i truly liked about it was the ending rhyme. It had a valid point however, i think you could have done a much better job of explaining why you feel this way. I think you could revise it to make it your own. However, with its simplicity, it has the ability to connect with even three year olds. I do not mean for this comment to seem so harsh but i think you could have done better.
    | Posted on 2007-11-18 00:00:00 | by ollie_wicked | [ Reply to This ]
      Sometimes you have to hear things bluntly to stop doing them. Bravo....... I love it..... not many people can come right out and say how our society really is.
    | Posted on 2007-05-30 00:00:00 | by isuperhero | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah it seems that some people play this game all there lives, i know a lot of people and thats all they do is blame other people for everything.

    Good write.

    Kube.
    | Posted on 2007-03-29 00:00:00 | by Kube | [ Reply to This ]
      Dude this is pretty tight . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

    I like this part the best though:
    This blame game
    Will always come back to you

    very nice. . . . . . . . . . . . very nice. . . . . . . . . . . . .


    haha. . . . . . . . . .I like how you were so sarcastic

    awesome overall message

    >>> >>> >>> >>> >>> >>> >>> >>> >>> >>>

    SD
    | Posted on 2007-03-29 00:00:00 | by SilentDreams42 | [ Reply to This ]
      You have provided a lot of very salient points in this short but highly effective piece of social sarcasm. Some may cringe out of recognition that this is how they pursue their lives...so bit it. Bravo on a work well written and presented.
    | Posted on 2007-03-29 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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