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    dots Submission Name: Essencedots
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    Author: Darkess
    ASL Info:    12/Female/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 30/93/39
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Passion
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       This might not make sense, but I see it all so clearly.

    (And the sane side of me has no clue.)


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         We're not so easily broken, you'll see. The dark, the dark, it binds, it binds us, our souls, to our bodies... Zombies of the light, you say? Perhaps. Perhaps.

         (This is me pretending.)

         Vague line of, between, in light and dark.

         This might not make sense, on a day of a world, where we are, we feel what you feel. A sort of light and whimsical, cold and musical grace, like snowflakes from the sky.

         A change of tone, a 'maybe' smile, hot, warmth, warm embrace, embrace the light and shun the dark like you were taught.

         Burning butterflies, burning like fire beneath the wind, beneath the gusts and the picturesque scenery, they destroy.

         If.

         I see it all so clearly, you must realize...

         Don't have to be perfect.
         You're not perfect.

         You can change the mood so quickly. You, we, us, with your, our tainted magic and an imagination... Our imagination. Pretend, maybe? Is it pretending if it's not real? Is it just imagining?

         Blue to red, icy dull red and hot to the touch blue.

         Torture.
         Between the lines.




    Submitted on 2007-03-29 17:38:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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       This reminds me of a story I'm working on now, well, two stories I'm working on, they kind of go hand in hand though.
    I really liked this because part of it sounds like disillusoned legend. It just goes together and falls into place where things should fall into place.

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    | Posted on 2007-04-12 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      
    | Posted on 2007-03-29 00:00:00 | by the Change | [ Reply to This ]
      i must admit, it is very confusing indeed! but i love to read it out loud; it makes my head spin, and my thoughts run wild. i loved the craziness in it and somehow felt like it was someone alien to us all who was reading this out loud. "This might not make sense, on a day of a world, where we are, we feel what you feel." -- this is what gave that sensation.

    and the rebellious, catastrophic voice when you presumed to burn the butterflies! i almost thought, "how dare you!" but then i lost myself again in your words.

    i am not quite sure what reaction you intended provoke, but i am veeeeeeery curious as to what on earth you are talking about. however seeing that the sane you has no clue what she has written, i shall not expect a illuminating answer.

    peace (and momentary sanity),
    drika
    | Posted on 2007-03-29 00:00:00 | by the Change | [ Reply to This ]


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