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    dots Submission Name: The symphony of the minddots

    Author: Jengrr
    ASL Info:    20/McBain
    Elite Ratio:    5.85 - 95/104/22
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 614
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       For all those who feel every emotion through music, and hear that music in the glory of nature

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    dotsThe symphony of the minddots

    The rain softly pounds the earth
    A sweet mellow harmony
    Full of slow deep strings
    And resonant movements
    Cool and flowing endlessly
    A kiss of gray light
    Into elegantly shadowed thoughts
    A gentle pleasant pressure
    Of contemplative mystery

    Blossoms into a ray of delight
    Resounded from the golden sun
    And glowing deep blue sky
    A bold and daring melody
    Of triumphant declaration
    Dazzling past clouds of doubt and worry
    Ringing brass and racing flutes
    In a dancing stream of joy

    A crash of loud cymbals
    And silence reigns
    The rushing thunder of bass
    Echoes darkly and steadily builds
    To a powerful flash of despair
    Swift melodies of anger
    Clash with powerful harmonies of agony
    A torrent of tears in minor key
    Tossed by the haunting wind of memory
    A raging storm of the soul

    Submitted on 2007-03-29 21:07:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    What a great poem, but correct me if I'm wrong but did everything switch in the end and blend together in the middle? Like good and bad things intertwineing and then battling in the end?
    Either way, thats how I thought of it and I really liked it. Your poems I have read so far remind me of something I would read in a little childrens poetry book.


    I am a kid at heart and I've always liked childrens books, and I am a sucker for poems too. I really liked this but I tend to be more dark and well... demented... so depression has caused that but i really like your stuff.

    Great write.

    | Posted on 2007-04-27 00:00:00 | by necrotic | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was pretty. One of the most primal sources for music is nature, where a lot of the sounds are derived from. Even without taking it from nature, watching the outside at night with some inspiring music playing can be a totally amazing experience for some people just by how they flow together. This reminds me of Kamikaze L'Amour, a book about a Synesthesaesiac musician and his weird girlfriend that records sounds from nature to try and find the core rhythm to which Shiva danced the world into existence.

    I usually don't get that much out of a poem.

    Very beautiful.
    | Posted on 2007-04-14 00:00:00 | by UnderINK | [ Reply to This ]
      this is beautiful.

    i adore your description of this piece. i am constantly in awe of both the power of music and the power of nature. even more so when they combine.
    i dont know about "normal" people but i know that every experience ive ever had or encounter or anything is always accompanied by a song or piece of music and when i hear it i am taken back to the moment it represents or if i am reminded of the moment the song is not far behind... sometimes its a good thing and sometimes it simply ruins good music

    in some ways this piece reminds me of a cross between a psalm and what Paul says in the beginning of Romans (i think) about nature/creation pointing to God.

    mostly i read this piece and feel it take me from the smells of a storm coming and the building crescendo to the storm with the thunder and lightening and then the rain in a minor key (it HAS to be a minor key... it absolutely HAS to be!) until all is well again.
    this is completely beautiful and spell binding.

    i think though that you need to put some punctuation into this piece. i wish i could help you in doing this i seriously do suck at punctuation and so while i realise that it is lacking i cannot help you correct this.

    i think, due the futility of my punctuating skills, i shall end my comment here though i could easily sing your praise a while longer on the beauty of this piece.

    i think i shall now go to bed pretending that this piece was solely for me tonight
    | Posted on 2007-03-30 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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