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    dots Submission Name: Worlddots
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    Author: Kube
    ASL Info:    24/M/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.93 - 64/56/32
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    Maybe we could do things differently next time
    Begin at war
    End in peace
    Start as opposites; then live as one

    Take it slowly
    Centuries are ahead
    We have the time
    Take it slowly!

    Just speak to each other
    Listen and learn
    There are other ways to solve our problems
    Donít make the angles cry;
    Donít make the demons laugh

    We need to be one
    We must be one
    Our brothers we fight
    Our wars a civil

    Women, children, kill them all!
    Whoever gets in the way
    That is our world
    That is what we are

    Live with it
    Deal with it
    Change yourself.




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      I like it. It's sad how true it is. People need to learn how to get along and accept each other for who they are. Not who they want them to be.
    | Posted on 2007-04-04 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]
      I donít quite know whether this is flat out sarcasm, or tongue in cheek, but that last stanza is a doozy totalitarian autocratic system kind of thingÖ. But anyways I donít think thatís what you were aiming at,,, more the contrasts of where we are and were we could be, nice,,, its ridiculous how plain things are to see and yet the powers that be cant seem to get their heads around a few simple solutions that could ease at least some of the problems we face,, with wars in particular.. but what can you do?? I know Iím just a small voice, it takes more than divided voices to encourage betterment and or positive change. The stupid thing is,, I think (but thatís just me) that our greatest problem is the lack of dealing with change and individuality in this ever shrinking world,,, some things cannot be excused that is true,, but us people seem to worry about to many ridiculous things that other people do, practice, believe in bla bla,,, when it doesnít affect us personally, we worry about others personal pitfalls but why? How else does one live if not by trial and error, or trial and finding a fit. we cant seem to get out heads around just excepting that individuality, with in reason of coarse. It will never be expectable to case harm to another personÖ. Ah people suck really. They make me sad.
    And I'm just rambleing again.

    Any ways nice piece.
    Peace
    | Posted on 2007-03-30 00:00:00 | by Andz | [ Reply to This ]


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