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1... pint... 2... pint...

Author: Black-Death
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1... pint... 2... pint...

As lie in my bead shedding theas tears for you… as the last drop falls out onto my pillow.. my love grows stronger for you… you hate me. You used me. And I love you. Now as im lieng in my bed with this knife so dull I take it and take it to my wrists… as the blade seems to soak up the blood with glee as the first pint drops out of me… I relize how much I love you… as the 2nd pint falls out.. I relized how much you hurt me.. as the 3rd pint comes out of my vains I start to feel sleepy…. Not sad… but happy knowing that im going to spend an inernity dead.. as the 4th pint go out I start to dream about you… I reach out for you… and you float away… the 5th pint… i die

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