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    dots Submission Name: Song Of The Universedots

    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsSong Of The Universedots

    He sang the world and climbed it rung on rung,
    And spoke the stars in their peculiar schemes,
    And made the Milky Way in silver streams,
    Then like confetti all the planets flung.
    The giant stars he carefully had strung
    About the sky to near and far extremes
    Until the night was like a realm of dreams,
    And so, at length, his peerless song was sung.

    Now in those stars I would forever ride,
    Those solar winds my unseen sails embrace,
    Though never with the stars would I collide,
    But travel on that I might see his face,
    To ply along that great celestial tide
    Drawn to His song by sweet unfathomed Grace.

    Submitted on 2007-03-30 10:48:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this sonnet seems to embrace both the celestial creation and the creator in a song or praise, "psalm" as someone put it. The desire to know the creator is much greater than to know the far reaches of space.

    I admire this simple & humble desire.

    Take care,

    | Posted on 2007-04-09 00:00:00 | by vohomegirl | [ Reply to This ]
      It's like a pray, a psalm
    | Posted on 2007-03-30 00:00:00 | by SageContagious | [ Reply to This ]
      simple and beautifully elegant.....

    "Those solar winds my unseen sails embrace,
    Though never with the stars would I collide,
    But travel on that I might see his face"

    my favorite little bit of the whole thing, that was.....

    as for the religious reference. tasteful, not overly fanatical, in fact, rather subtle....it took me a moment to notice.....lovely

    | Posted on 2007-03-30 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem has a very effective rhyme scheme that paints a perfect picture for the reader. I like how it give a hint of beliefs and religion, yet it wasn't religious. Great Write!!!!!
    | Posted on 2007-03-30 00:00:00 | by Ensult | [ Reply to This ]

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