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    dots Submission Name: Magic Carpet dots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
    Total Views: 571
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       "My dancing, my drinking ,and singing weave me the mat on which my soul will sleep in the world of spirits." Old Man of Halmahera, Indonesia from"The Soul of The World - A Modern Book of Hours by Phil Cousineau

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    dotsMagic Carpet dots

    Thank You, Blessed Old Man of
    Halmahera, Indonesia ~
    for <@> see
    tHE Great Weaver
    has looped
    our colors

    & our mats

    As the
    A magic carpet ride

    Submitted on 2007-03-30 12:28:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was a bit too minimalistic for my taste. Not much detail. I like grand cavasses to bath in the painter dired brush strokes. I agree that the eye ball was distracting it took me a minute to get it. I think just using eye would be an easier way to tie the i to site and self. My you enter into the tomb where the ancients loom and weave together fabric strewn over their rotten bodies. May burial shrouds aid you ascent into the clouds and may you choose weather or not to return.
    | Posted on 2007-07-13 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]
      hey hi thanx for the comments and chat i havent been writing or replying much your posts alwaz bring a bright thought to the day

    hope all is well and as soon as i can i will start posting some new stuff

    thnx sandman
    | Posted on 2007-05-31 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      I want to ride that magic carpet to a world of inner peace and tranquility. Beautiful write tiff. N btw, i guess it would make aaron pokey. ;)
    | Posted on 2007-03-30 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very fun and thought inspiring. Very creative, too.

    I don't think you should have used <@> to represent what I'm assuming is I, though. It's extremely distracting. I also don't understand your phrasing. I think that one word per line concept just doesn't work here. It feels very spurratic and disconnected. I think you'd be better off phrasing it more like

    And our mats are
    a carpet

    As the Rainbow Path
    a magic carpet ride.

    Good job, regardless.
    | Posted on 2007-03-30 00:00:00 | by Venia | [ Reply to This ]

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